tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10583449.post111958846762316829..comments2023-09-23T04:56:51.617-07:00Comments on Forensics & Faith: Editing, Day 9--Sentence Rhythm/Tight Writing~ Brandilyn Collinshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04771812607327238979noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10583449.post-1119735158681033032005-06-25T14:32:00.000-07:002005-06-25T14:32:00.000-07:00Talk about chillbumps . . .Let me steal this Brand...Talk about chillbumps . . .<BR/><BR/>Let me steal this Brandylinism: Sheesh!Angie Poolehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05652872135732620550noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10583449.post-1119729887267540442005-06-25T13:04:00.000-07:002005-06-25T13:04:00.000-07:00My question is about this line:"Too late, Christy....My question is about this line:<BR/><BR/>"Too late, Christy.” He dragged her to her feet, shoved her against the stall door. The metal latch bit into her back. She moaned. “No more chances for you.” <BR/><BR/>I keep hearing that I should give each character their own paragraph, so when I saw, "She moaned." on this line and then another quote from Vince, it threw me. <BR/><BR/>Now I'm confused about it, period! LOL! Brandilyn, what's the "rule of thumb"?Dineen A. Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08560463944362266736noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10583449.post-1119656060290625252005-06-24T16:34:00.000-07:002005-06-24T16:34:00.000-07:00Was wondering about Paige myself ...Was wondering about Paige myself ...C.J. Darlingtonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16541599888177703695noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10583449.post-1119643843578282142005-06-24T13:10:00.000-07:002005-06-24T13:10:00.000-07:00Does to me Stuart. Of course, I'm twisted. : ) Th...Does to me Stuart. Of course, I'm twisted. : ) <BR/><BR/>This is so helpful BC. Thanks. <BR/>How's Paige? Chugging along I hope. Hopefully not in the sense of Simon Legre - choo! choo!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10583449.post-1119622175677175502005-06-24T07:09:00.000-07:002005-06-24T07:09:00.000-07:00More great stuff Brandylin :)I was just thinking h...More great stuff Brandylin :)<BR/><BR/>I was just thinking how SR can also help give voice to different PoVs.<BR/><BR/>The above sample shows a great view of a chaotic struggle between two people from Christy's scared point of view.<BR/><BR/>Yet I imagine the structure would look different from Vince's enraged PoV. Perhaps more measured near the beginning when he is in control then getting blurred and choppy after being hit by the shovel.<BR/><BR/>make any sense?Stuarthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01319201996699675786noreply@blogger.com