tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10583449.post112408750421403613..comments2023-09-23T04:56:51.617-07:00Comments on Forensics & Faith: Feedback on Pitches~ Brandilyn Collinshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04771812607327238979noreply@blogger.comBlogger10125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10583449.post-32146661847179432802010-08-17T07:09:26.801-07:002010-08-17T07:09:26.801-07:00Hi, Brandilyn. First, I want to say thank you for ...Hi, Brandilyn. First, I want to say thank you for all of your input on the ACFW first-timers loop and your information on pitches, etc.<br /><br />Now, my pitch:<br /><br />A young missionary returns to Costa Rica to unlock memories masking the brutal slaying of her first love’s father.<br /><br />Is that specific enough? I love your adivce re: anticipating questions that might result from the pitch. I'm working on that now.Heather Sunserihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12552506888985553471noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10583449.post-42508554693065225882010-08-17T07:09:13.324-07:002010-08-17T07:09:13.324-07:00Hi, Brandilyn. First, I want to say thank you for ...Hi, Brandilyn. First, I want to say thank you for all of your input on the ACFW first-timers loop and your information on pitches, etc.<br /><br />Now, my pitch:<br /><br />A young missionary returns to Costa Rica to unlock memories masking the brutal slaying of her first love’s father.<br /><br />Is that specific enough? I love your adivce re: anticipating questions that might result from the pitch. I'm working on that now.Heather Sunserihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12552506888985553471noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10583449.post-1124174028068851472005-08-15T23:33:00.000-07:002005-08-15T23:33:00.000-07:00Hmm...I'm starting to wonder if my pitch line ("A ...Hmm...I'm starting to wonder if my pitch line ("A teenaged rape victim fights for the right to carry her child to term.") still hits all the right buttons. <BR/><BR/>And it seems like pitches are everywhere this month. Over at <A HREF="http://knightagency.blogspot.com" REL="nofollow">the Knight Agency</A>, Deidre Knight has been running a pitch critique contest. I think it's going to the end of the month (you'll probably have to scroll a bit to find it), but there's been some good crits bouncing around in the comment thread. :-)<BR/><BR/>Thanks for weighing in with your perspective on this, Brandilyn.Valhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12984698615501794539noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10583449.post-1124160698910948702005-08-15T19:51:00.000-07:002005-08-15T19:51:00.000-07:00Thanks for the comments Brandilyn. I sure am havin...Thanks for the comments Brandilyn. I sure am having trouble coming up with something stronger than revisted, lol, although I have the body part fixed. Guess I'll keep plugging along. Although my friends says it is distracting me from finishing the last scene in my WIP. But I'll fix that and do it now. If you still have this subject going tomorrow I may have something. Again thanks for the something to chew on. Hugs. :0)Pammerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01883119904346766083noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10583449.post-1124141303550211412005-08-15T14:28:00.000-07:002005-08-15T14:28:00.000-07:00This comment has been removed by a blog administrator.Gina Conroyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13647753231391009981noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10583449.post-1124133329835839752005-08-15T12:15:00.000-07:002005-08-15T12:15:00.000-07:00My original pitch was: A young reporter stumbles o...My original pitch was: A young reporter stumbles on a body <BR/>and fights for her life in a game of cat and mouse."<BR/><BR/>This is my revised one: A television reporter discovers a body at the theater. While she investigates, she enters a intense game of cat and mouse when the murderer targets her.<BR/><BR/>Is that any more specific? It is really hard to distill a big idea into 25 words and make it sound unique from everything else that has been written.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10583449.post-1124118752818766772005-08-15T08:12:00.000-07:002005-08-15T08:12:00.000-07:00All your marketing experience has really paid off....All your marketing experience has really paid off. I don't know if I'll ever learn the art of distilling my novel into an interesting pitch, or even synopsis. Here's my latest:<BR/><BR/>Mistaken for a servant, a noblewoman escapes her family’s murder and searches for the identity of the killer, knowing that he also hunts her.Tina Helmuthhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02210602508259810567noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10583449.post-1124115874565797582005-08-15T07:24:00.000-07:002005-08-15T07:24:00.000-07:00Great info Brandilyn! :DAnd for information purpos...Great info Brandilyn! :D<BR/><BR/>And for information purposes. A one sheet is a single sheet of paper that lists your contact information, a bio, and a short summary of your book. From what I have heard people use them for two purposes. <B>1)</B> To help them get through a pitch by having something to reference. and <B>2)</B> To have something to leave with a willing editor (not all of them will take one) that can help the editor remember who they are and what they are working on (if interested in the book naturally).<BR/><BR/>At least that's what I've picked up from snooping around. ;) I've never actually used one myself.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10583449.post-1124113201139306072005-08-15T06:40:00.000-07:002005-08-15T06:40:00.000-07:00Thanks for the answers and all the wonderful examp...Thanks for the answers and all the wonderful examples, BC!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10583449.post-1124091622518109092005-08-15T00:40:00.000-07:002005-08-15T00:40:00.000-07:00Living in CA has its advantages! I get to post fir...Living in CA has its advantages! I get to post first. LOL<BR/><BR/>I thought I had my pitch line down:<BR/><BR/><I>A faith shattered. A secret revealed. An aspiring artist risks love and life to find the man who holds the answers to her past.</I><BR/><BR/>But after reading your blog, I'm thinking maybe not. Is this more specific? <BR/><BR/><I>When an aspiring artist discovers her unknown father is still alive, she risks losing newfound love and life to find him.</I><BR/><BR/>or<BR/><BR/><I>When an aspiring artist discovers her unknown father is still alive, her search uncovers love, a brother and a madman.</I><BR/><BR/>It's really hard getting your whole book down to one line, but you already know that!Dineen A. Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08560463944362266736noreply@blogger.com