Monday, July 25, 2005

Sagging Middles & Desire

No, I’m not talking about middle age and waistlines, and the wish to be thinner.

I skimmed through the discussion board this weekend for the first time in a couple weeks and noticed a couple BGs talking about the problem of sagging middles in their wips. This post is not a direct answer to those BGs’s particular issues, but their dialogue did trigger today’s topic.

Most of the time, if your wip suffers from the middle saggies, the problem lies in the beginning of your book.

It’s a common error for writers to assume that wherever some symptom crops up, therein lies the problem. Not necessarily so, when we’re talking about story structure. Consider your storyline as a rope that you want to pull taut. You find that the rope is sagging in the middle. Is that where the problem will be fixed—by shoring up the middle? No. You have to go to one end of the rope (in this case, the beginning of your story), and pull it tighter. Then, voila, up comes the middle.

In Getting Into Character I talk about the basic story structure I call the Four Ds (Secret #2—Action Objectives). Those Ds stand for Desire, Distancing, Denial and Devastation. The foundation of your novel is the first D—the character’s Desire. This Desire—what the character Wants, with a capital W—is what pulls your character through the story. It is the path upon which the character has set himself and wants to keep on as conflicts come along that want to push him off that path.

We all know that our stories must have conflict, or they’ll be really boring. When it comes to story, the word conflict means obstacles in a character’s path as he/she tries to pursue something. Well, if you’re throwing out obstacles that stand in the way of some pursued thing, it might help to know exactly what that thing is. The more you know about that thing, and why the character wants it, the more possibilities for conflict in your story.

What’s typically happening in a saggy middle? The story runs out of gas (to bring in another metaphor). In other words, you run out of conflicts to throw at the character. When folks come to me with their saggy middle tales of woe, I always take them back to the Desire concept. Nine times out of ten, I find that this is where the problem lies—the author does not fully understand the character’s Desire.

The Desire makes that “rope” of your storyline taut. It pulls the character through the story. No matter what happens, the character doggedly pursues this Desire (whether he realizes that’s what he’s doing or not). You’ve got to fully understand what your character’s Desire is if you’re going to have a taut storyline with no sagging middle.

A couple guidelines about discovering your protagonist’s Desire:

1. It needs to be stated in the form of an action verb. What does your character want to do? State of being verbs are too general to give rise to specific action. For example, Jill’s Desire: to be successful as a realtor. Be successful—what does that mean? Success means different things to different people. Does it mean make a certain amount of money each year? Does it mean sell more houses than her competitive cousin? Does it mean make just enough so she doesn’t have to worry about putting food on the table? You’d need to define success for this character, then state that in the Desire. Perhaps after success is defined for Jill, her Desire would be: to sell enough houses to make $1 million a year. Okay, now you’re getting somewhere. Ideas for conflict start to pop. Maybe Jill sells lots of houses, but the commissions are too small to equal $1 million. Maybe she finally hits that amount of money, but some huge bill, like medical costs for an injury, sets her back financially, or she gets swindled out of some money. Etc.

2. The Desire needs to be very specific. You might think that the more general your character’s Desire, the more possibilities you’ll have for introducing conflict into the character’s path as he pursues that Desire. The exact opposite is true. The more specific the Desire, the more you’ll understand about the exact actions the character must take to obtain that Desire. And the more you know about exact actions the character needs to take, the more ideas you’ll have for possible conflict against each of those actions.

Sometimes a character’s Desire will be two-pronged, with one prong leading to the next. Example: to sell enough houses to make $1 million a year so that I can send my three teenagers to the colleges of their choice. Two prongs give you more possibilities for conflict. In this example, the protagonist, against many odds, could make $1 million a year, only to have one teenager decide not to go to college, and one not get accepted into his choice of university.

3. The Desire needs to be absolutely correct. One small tweak in the Desire will make for a very different story, just like two lines that begin together but proceed just a tiny bit away from each other will grow farther and farther apart as they go on. In Getting Into Character, I use the analogy of a flawed female protagonist whose Desire is: to build a trusting marriage by never again lying to her husband. Now look at this small tweak: to build a trusting marriage by never again being caught in a lie by her husband. The outcome she wants is the same, but the possibilities of actions and choices that may arise from the two Desires are very different indeed. The result would be two very different stories.

BTW, we are talking here about your protagonist’s conscious Desire. Sometimes characters have an unconscious Desire also, but that’s another subject.

So—what is your protagonist’s conscious Desire? State it in active verbs, make it very specific (two-pronged if possible), and make it absolutely correct for the story. When you figure out this Desire, you’ll have more ideas for what your character must do to pursue it (action), which will lead to more ideas for obstacles that can stand in the way (conflict). And with more ideas for possible action and conflict, the less likely you’ll be to deal with a saggy middle.

Your assignment, should you choose to accept it, is to discover your protagonist’s Desire and post a comment to tell us what it is. Tomorrow we’ll discuss some of these Desires to see if they’re on target. Warning: this assignment may not be as easy as you think.


Anonymous said...

OK, I lurk more than I comment, but I'll be brave and bite on this one. My protagonist's desire is to keep and raise her dead best friend's baby as her own, despite the child's having a living grandfather.

The actual one liner I have to describe the story's premise is: In 1944 Virginia, a woman assumes her best friend's identity to keep the child she loves.

Anonymous said...

Thanks, Brandilyn. This comes with great timing as I truly hit the middle of my WIP.

My main character is a young tv reporter who has moved to a new city too late to help her great-aunt, the main reason for her move.

Her desire is to build her skills quickly so she can move up to a better station while maintaining her independence.

Cara Putman

Stuart said...


My protagonist's desire is to prove himself a worthy warrior of the Empire. To show that his value is not determined by his hatch-status as the last to hatch in his Sire's final clutch.

He is also driven to prove valuable enough so that if the truth about the event that gave him the oportunity to break out of societies place for him, that he will be valuable enough that he will not be cast back to his original standing.

hmmm... probably a bit too wordy and convoluted...need to work on that more. :)

Rebecca LuElla Miller said...

My protag's conscious desire is to find the way home. His unconscious desire is to discover what "home" actually means.

Val said...

I decided to give this a shot:

Diana's desire is to carry her child to term and find an adoptive family for him, so she can prove to her father that she is old enough to make her own decisions.

I think that might be too long, so I'm still brainstorming on ways to shorten it.

However, I have a question: How would it impact my story if I transposed Diana's desire? If, instead of the above sentence, I wrote: Diana's desire is to prove to her father that she is old enough to make her own decisions by carrying her child to term and finding an adoptive family for him.

I feel like the story could come out completely different because the foundational desire (the first prong that motivates everything else) would be completely different. Am I correct in thinking that?

Do you identify the desire of other characters as well (such as the antagonist)?

Anonymous said...

I like Becky's comment about conscious and unconscious desire - now I'm wondering if my protagonist's desire for a sense of belonging is conscious or unconscious - and is it enough? But then she (a paramedic) also has a desire to make some sense out of life. Hmmm...

C.J. Darlington said...

I have two main characters in my second novel. The first and primary is a teenage girl. Her conscious desire is to survive. Her unconscious desire is for a family that loves her for her.

My second character (a cop) desires to find out who killed her brother - and make them pay.

Megan DiMaria said...

My protagonist, a romance-deprived photographer's assistant, longs to experience a sizzling, bodice-ripping affair – with her nerdy, practical husband of twenty-four years.

Grady Houger said...

Cool, an assignment! Surprisingly difficult.
In a WIP, the hero desires to keep his vows of holiness to God, but also desires the love offered by a woman who struggles with basic morality and is pursued by the consequences that endanger all around her.
She is not a heroine. She is fire, desiring anything she wants; the hero, peace for her soul, to survive the deadly mistakes she made.

Rich said...

Suspense story:
Margaret's desire is to take control of her life and conguer her fears.
Addison's desire is to find the hit man hired to kill her and keep her safe.

Anonymous said...

In the better late than never department, here is the desire for my protagonist and antagonist. Hopefully, I can squeak in the door for comments by BC since I missed the Monday posting...

Protagonist (Son)

To build a large and successful church so he can free himself of his father's embarrassing reputation.

Antagonist (Father)

To convince everyone he meets to burn with desire for Christ so the Church will no longer be an embarrassment to God.